I began reading the
late Elmore Leonard's books before I knew anything about writing or that I
wanted to be a writer. Back then, a lot of his books were westerns filled with
gritty characters, powerful stories, and tough, convincing dialogue.
I remember reading
Last Stand at Sabre River and Hombre, both of which were made into successful
movies. Later, after Leonard had moved from westerns to crime and suspense
stories, I read Mr. Majestyk, The Big Bounce and the Moonshine War.
For the past four
years I have watched with great pleasure the TV series "Justified,"
based on Leonard's book "Raylan" and partly written by Leonard. Season five is coming. I encourage you to take a look. It is writing at its best. And Timothy Olyphant as Raylan Givens is great.
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Elmore Leonard was
a writer's writer. Not only could he spin a great story, he could create characters
you loved to hate or hated to love and some you simply learned to tolerate
because they made the other characters interesting.
If you like
reading William Faulkner, you probably will not like reading Elmore Leonard. As
brilliant as it was, Faulkner's stream-of-conscious narration probably drove
Leonard nuts. He believed the writer should never get in the way of the story. (NOTE:
See “Hooptedoodle″ at the end of Leonard's rules)
I am not sure when
Leonard wrote his 10 Rule of Writing, but I found them a few years ago and
filed them away.
Some of you may
already know those 10 rules, but I am betting a lot of you don't. So let me
share them with you today. Read them, consider them and most of all, try to
follow them when you write your own books.
I think you will
be glad you did.
Here they are:
- Never open a book with weather.
If it’s only to create atmosphere, and not a character’s
reaction to the weather, you don’t want to go on too long. The reader is apt to
leaf ahead looking for people. There are exceptions. If you happen to be Barry
Lopez, who has more ways to describe ice and snow than an Eskimo, you can do
all the weather reporting you want.
- Avoid prologues.
They can be annoying, especially a prologue following an
introduction that comes after a foreword. But these are ordinarily found in
nonfiction. A prologue in a novel is back story, and you can drop it in
anywhere you want.
There is a prologue in John Steinbeck’s Sweet Thursday, but it’s O.K. because a character in
the book makes the point of what my rules are all about. He says: “I like a lot
of talk in a book and I don’t like to have nobody tell me what the guy that’s
talking looks like. I want to figure out what he looks like from the way he
talks. . . . figure out what the guy’s thinking from what he says. I like some
description but not too much of that. . . . Sometimes I want a book to break
loose with a bunch of hooptedoodle. . . . Spin up some pretty words maybe or
sing a little song with language. That’s nice. But I wish it was set aside so I
don’t have to read it. I don’t want hooptedoodle to get mixed up with the
story.” (Note: I already violated that
rule in my book Finding Billy Battles. Sorry Elmore. I won't do it again.)
- Never use a verb other than “said” to carry dialogue.
The line of dialogue belongs to the character; the verb is
the writer sticking his nose in. But said is far less intrusive than grumbled,
gasped, cautioned, lied. I once noticed Mary McCarthy ending a line of dialogue
with “she asseverated,” and had to stop reading to get the dictionary. (NOTE: I learned this wonderful rule in journalism school at the
University or Kansas. It has served me well.)
- Never use an adverb to modify the verb “said” …
…he admonished gravely. To use an adverb this way (or almost
any way) is a mortal sin. The writer is now exposing himself in earnest, using
a word that distracts and can interrupt the rhythm of the exchange. I have a
character in one of my books tell how she used to write historical romances
“full of rape and adverbs.” (NOTE: I l also learned this wonderful rule in journalism school at the
University or Kansas. As with rule #3, it has served me well.)
- Keep your exclamation points under control.
You are allowed no more than two or three per 100,000 words
of prose. If you have the knack of playing with exclaimers the way Tom Wolfe
does, you can throw them in by the handful.
- Never use the words “suddenly” or “all hell broke loose.”
This rule doesn’t require an explanation. I have noticed
that writers who use “suddenly” tend to exercise less control in the
application of exclamation points.
- Use regional dialect, patois, sparingly.
Once you start spelling words in dialogue phonetically and
loading the page with apostrophes, you won’t be able to stop. Notice the way
Annie Proulx captures the flavor of Wyoming voices in her book of short stories
Close Range.
- Avoid detailed descriptions of characters.
Which Steinbeck covered. In Ernest Hemingway’s Hills Like White Elephants what do the
“American and the girl with him” look like? “She had taken off her hat and put
it on the table.” That’s the only reference to a physical description in the
story, and yet we see the couple and know them by their tones of voice, with
not one adverb in sight.
- Don’t go into great detail describing places and things.
Unless you’re Margaret
Atwood and can paint scenes with language or write landscapes in the
style of Jim Harrison. But even if you’re good at it, you don’t want
descriptions that bring the action, the flow of the story, to a standstill.
And finally:
- Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip.
A rule that came to mind in 1983. Think of what you skip
reading a novel: thick paragraphs of prose you can see have too many words in
them. What the writer is doing, he’s writing, perpetrating hooptedoodle,
perhaps taking another shot at the weather, or has gone into the character’s
head, and the reader either knows what the guy’s thinking or doesn’t care. I’ll
bet you don’t skip dialogue.
My most important rule is one that sums up the 10.
If it sounds like writing, I rewrite it.
Or, if proper usage gets in the way, it may have to go. I
can’t allow what we learned in English composition to disrupt the sound and
rhythm of the narrative. It’s my attempt to remain invisible, not distract the
reader from the story with obvious writing. (Joseph
Conrad said something about words getting in the way of what you want
to say.)
If I write in scenes and always from the point of view of a
particular character — the one whose view best brings the scene to life — I’m
able to concentrate on the voices of the characters telling you who they are
and how they feel about what they see and what’s going on, and I’m nowhere in
sight.
What Steinbeck did in Sweet Thursday was
title his chapters as an indication, though obscure, of what they cover. “Whom
the Gods Love They Drive Nuts” is one, “Lousy Wednesday” another.
The third
chapter is titled “Hooptedoodle 1″ and the 38th chapter “Hooptedoodle 2″ as
warnings to the reader, as if Steinbeck is saying: “Here’s where you’ll see me
taking flights of fancy with my writing, and it won’t get in the way of the
story. Skip them if you want.”
Sweet Thursday came out in 1954, when I was just
beginning to be published, and I’ve never forgotten that prologue.
Did I read the hooptedoodle chapters? Every word.
Thank you Elmore Leonard. RIP
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